My hiatus is officially over…. i think…

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Okay, that took longer than I thought it would!

 

I passed all my exams, earned a shiny new degree, and also got a job! I’ve been super busy the past few weeks, but things are starting to calm down (unless I just jinxed that by saying it :)).

 

 

So now that I’m back, here’s a snippet from my as-yet uncontracted speculative LGBTQ YA novel. Almost all of the rejections have been positive, so I’m still hopeful Psyche & Co. will find a home. Find more snippets from this book here.

This snippet skips some sentences of substance after the last one I posted. (Heh, alliteration.) I’m keeping anything that could be spoilery off the blog for now so it couldn’t be helped. (I think. If something’s already slipped there’s not much I can do about it, ‘cuz the tubes never forget. :))

The first dialogue is Cam’s, he and Psyche are still on the phone. I know this all sounds cryptic. I’d apologize, but it wouldn’t be sincere. 😉

 

“You could’ve said no anytime.”

“I know.” She thought about what they’d done, the kissing and groping, and what everyone thought they’d done which was much more. She wanted to apologize but knew how that would sound, so she didn’t. Which left her with nothing to say.

“See you tomorrow.”

“Yeah.” She wanted to see him right now but since he “knew about her” it would only be frustrating.

 

 Thanks for reading!

Let me know what you think about this snippet, or about the weather, or anything that’s on your mind (as long as it’s kind), and then head out to read more snippets! Choose Weekend Writing Warriors, or Snippet Sunday, or you could try both!

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13 responses

  1. Good job of showing that awkward feeling when one does not know what to say. It’s so tough to do, but is there a way to show that she wanted to see him right now without coming out and saying it?

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com/2014/07/weekend-writing-warriors-blog-hop-72014.html

    July 19, 2014 at 12:27 pm

  2. siobhanmuir

    Congratulations on everything, Charli! And yeah, that conversation was painful for them. I can feel her hesitation and helplessness. Great snippet. 🙂

    July 19, 2014 at 6:04 pm

  3. Great show of emotions despite her hesitation and unspoken words. Good snippet!

    July 20, 2014 at 1:25 am

  4. “Which left her with nothing to say.”

    A perfect sentence for a perfectly awkward conversation. I like Psyche. 🙂

    July 20, 2014 at 6:16 am

  5. Welcome back! Great conflict and awkwardness in this snippet, sets up the story well 🙂

    July 20, 2014 at 3:57 pm

  6. Congratulations on the degree and best wishes with the new job! All exciting stuff! Enjoyed the excerpt, it was every bit as awkward and stilted as a convo like that can be, so well done.

    July 20, 2014 at 7:00 pm

  7. Very good. Your characters voices are real and true.

    July 20, 2014 at 8:45 pm

  8. chellecordero

    First congrats on all of your hard-earned accomplishments.
    This is the first that I am reading your snippet and coming in without a lot of the background. You’ve captured the awkward feelings nicely and it’s intriguing that others think there was more than what actually transpired.
    At the end, perhaps you might have used her “thought” of something she wanted to say such as “She wanted to say … , but she didn’t” instead of the simple narrative. That might carry the same intensity. Good snippet.

    July 21, 2014 at 3:06 pm

  9. It does sound cryptic. Congratulation on graduating!

    July 23, 2014 at 10:28 am

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